I Wrote a Poem that I would Like to Share!

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   Posted 10/21/2010 7:26 AM (GMT -6)   
Always There

I always trust my first impression,
Trust without regret.
And I knew I did not like you.
The moment we first met.

You were lurking in the shadows,
Before you showed you ugly face.
Was I there at just the wrong time,
Or maybe the wrong place?

Now you have been the reason,
For so many tears I've cried.
I simply can't escape you,
There is no place to hide.

You are right there with me,
When I go to bed at night.
My husband on my left,
And you there on my right.

And when I close my eyes,
Into my dreams you creep.
Mind and body both exhausted,
Oh please just let me sleep.

You're the first thing that I see,
When I open up my eyes.
I tell everyone, "I'm fine",
But some see through my lies.

They see through my facade,
And know the smile isn't real.
It is only a disguise,
To hide how bad I feel.

I don't think I can take it,
I may just go insane.
I curse the day I met you!
I hate you Chronic Pain!!

Hoping everyone has a LPD! Take care!


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   Posted 10/21/2010 7:39 AM (GMT -6)   
 I love it! Also, you gavce me a great idea for "homewhork" topic. (I have long wanted to do a weekly homework topic)
*Warmest Hugg*

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And sorry I could not travel both
And be one traveler, long I stood

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Post Edited (Dani Henson) : 10/21/2010 8:26:51 AM (GMT-6)

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   Posted 10/21/2010 7:47 AM (GMT -6)   
Wow that was awesome!!!!

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   Posted 10/21/2010 8:39 AM (GMT -6)   


   Hello Becky! That has to be the best one that I have read in quite some time!

      You said it all in a nut shell!

        SE wink

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   Posted 10/21/2010 8:42 AM (GMT -6)   
Very well said!  An excellent and captivating poem!  As I was reading it I thought you  were possibling referring to memory of a bad experience you might have had, or something along that line, and then to see that is is chronic pain you were referring to.  It all fits doesn't it!  Chronic Pain is like a super bad memory, that just won't go away, as you so eloquently put it in your poem!
A truely excellent poem Beckey! Thanks for sharing it with us!
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   Posted 10/21/2010 11:53 AM (GMT -6)   
Thank you all! I love writing and I used to write a LOT of poetry. It seems like my pain has stopped me from doing this. Maybe writing about CP will be a breakthrough for me! I have always had a hard time sharing my poems because I never think they are good enough! I appreciate your replies very very much!

Hugs and Love,
Spinal Stenosis L3/L4, L4/L5 & L5/S1 with Nerve Impingement, Fibromyalgia, TMJ, GERD, Severe Depression, VERY Large Cyst Right Ovary causing mild twisting, Small Cysts Left Ovary & 3 Large Cysts Uterus and Possible RA

Medications - MS-Contin, Cymbalta, Famotidine and currently Prednisone

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   Posted 10/21/2010 12:10 PM (GMT -6)   
oh wow, i love it

it expresses all of our feelings doesn't it

great job my friend

I wish I could wipe away all of our pain!!!

One day at a time!!

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   Posted 10/21/2010 2:36 PM (GMT -6)   
    Nice work Beckey , I think you said it all about how folks feel about pain , its shows real talent I hope you continue to express yourself thru your writing ! Awesome Sweetheart !!! Love Mikel

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   Posted 10/21/2010 6:43 PM (GMT -6)   
Beautiful... You gave it wonderful personification. I pictured a huge, ugly constant companion there to give you grief.

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   Posted 10/21/2010 9:20 PM (GMT -6)   

WOW! You have GREAT talent!

I was very moved & touched.

Thanks SO much for sharing!

~Black Satin Phoenix~

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   Posted 10/21/2010 11:15 PM (GMT -6)   
Hi Becky:

Your poem gave me goosebumps! Please don't hestitate to share your writings in the future!


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   Posted 10/22/2010 5:34 AM (GMT -6)   

Wow, you have written what so many of us feel but are often unable to put into words.
Keep up the great work, was an absolute pleasure to read your poem.

I pray that you get answers to relieve your pain.

Incredible as it seems, my life is based on a true story :+)

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   Posted 10/22/2010 6:44 AM (GMT -6)   
Wow....thank you all soooo much! You brought tears to my eyes! I am so happy that you enjoyed my poem! Like I said, I am always afraid to share because I do not think it is "good enough"! All of your encouraging words may just keep me writing! Wishing you all a LPD! Thank you!

Love and Hugs,
Spinal Stenosis L3/L4, L4/L5 & L5/S1 with Nerve Impingement, Fibromyalgia, TMJ, GERD, Severe Depression, VERY Large Cyst Right Ovary causing mild twisting, Small Cysts Left Ovary & 3 Large Cysts Uterus and Possible RA

Medications - MS-Contin, Cymbalta, Famotidine and currently Prednisone

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   Posted 10/22/2010 12:19 PM (GMT -6)   
Beckey, never ever let anyone tell you something isn't good enough. The person who says that is speaking only for themselves, and often their words are hurtful because of their own past experiences with rejection.

I've had some of my writings published, so I feel quite confident in saying your poem was excellent. I would encourage you to keep writing and perhaps even consider branching out into short stories as well. You have a gift for words and using them eloquently, so please keep sharing.

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   Posted 10/22/2010 3:12 PM (GMT -6)   
Thank you for sharing! VERY well said!



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   Posted 10/22/2010 11:36 PM (GMT -6)   

As I read the words in each stanza I could totally feel what you feel, as I experience many of the same feelings. Excellent and please do keep writing and posting. If you love to write, and obviously you do, then the subject matter isn't as important as the words and feelings that come through. Feel free to post one of your poems any times. Also, think about a small, self-published book. It just might be very helpful to others who are going through pain and even other serious health issues. You never know where it might take you.

Warm hugs!
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   Posted 10/23/2010 1:30 AM (GMT -6)   
That was so good. Thank you for sharing the poem, it has made my day.

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